Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
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the damaging
a damaging
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violence
on television and in computer Use synonyms
games
or not. While some Use synonyms
people
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videos
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video
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scene
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scenes
murdering
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people
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violence
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behavior
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people
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games
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People
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behavior
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violence
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Moreover
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programs
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violence
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instead
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violence
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite