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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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 digital days and ages,
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the break-up of science and technology like TV , social media and video games have a great impact on
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intellectual and social development. While some
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 argue that violence on television programs and
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 society, others refuse
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the idea that it has no considerable effect on the whole society. There are various compelling reasons why
people
 assert movies with violent features have an adverse impact on the behaviours of
people
 . The main reason is that
people
’s behaviours could be misleading under the influence of aggressive movies.
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people
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tend to mimic the actions of some heroes in ht
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 increase in the level of violence. Another reason is that
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 long exposure to violent
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scenes
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scences
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scenes
 in movies
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people
 become more
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hostile
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hostile
 and provoke
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uncontrolled
 thoughts. Many
people
 are most likely to suffer from high blood pressure and heart rate in response to real depictions of
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event
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 which can spoil the harmony of
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 society. The best solution for
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 issue is to spend more time on other activities, especially
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outdoor
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outdoor
 activities since
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 health but
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 us become more sociable.
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,
parent
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 should encourage their children to spend time with
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 friends and focus more on the time management of
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 children to have the best solution for
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conclusion
conlusion
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conclusion
, watching films with
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hazardous
hazadious
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hazardous
 content has a detrimental effect on
people
's behaviours. With the joint cooperation between parents and governments,
this
 problem can be tackled.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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