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The Expenditure of France and UK on Consumer Goods in 2010.

#expenditure #france #uk #consumer #goods
The graph illustrates the
expenditure
 of two countries which are France and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom on consumer goods in 2010. Generally, France had
higher
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a higher
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consuming
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consumption
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 of computers and
Perfume
while
UK
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the UK
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 had higher
expenditure
to
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on
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cars
,
books
 and
cameras
. In terms of
UK
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the UK
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, their consumers
expend
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spend
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 the
highest
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most
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 money to get
cars
 which is above 450,000
pounds
.
Furthermore
,
books
 were the most
expenditure
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expensive
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 without
cars
by
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apply
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almost 420,000
pounds
.
Cameras’
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Cameras
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 consumers spent approximately 369,000
pounds
 in 2010, but computers had been expended less than
cameras
. The least
consumers’
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consumer’
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expenditure
 ware
perfume
 by almost 145,000
pounds
. On the other
hands
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hand
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, France consumers had
higher
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a higher
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expenditure
for
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on
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Cars
 by exactly 400,000
pounds
while
computers’
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computers
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consuming
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apply
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expended less slightly than
cars
’ consuming.
Books
,
perfume
 and
cameras
 were less
expenditure
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expensive
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 respectively which
were
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was
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 exactly 300,000
pounds
 to buy
books
, 200,000
pounds
 to get
perfume
 and 150,000 to obtain
cameras
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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