The Expenditure of France and UK on Consumer Goods in 2010.

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The graph illustrates the
expenditure
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of two countries which are France and
United
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the United
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Kingdom on consumer goods in 2010. Generally, France had
higher
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a higher
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consuming
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of computers and
Perfume
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while
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UK
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the UK
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had higher
expenditure
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to
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on
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cars
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,
books
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and
cameras
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. In terms of
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the UK
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, their consumers
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the
highest
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most
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money to get
cars
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which is above 450,000
pounds
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.
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,
books
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were the most
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expenditure
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expensive
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without
cars
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by
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almost 420,000
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.
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Cameras’
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consumers spent approximately 369,000
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in 2010, but computers had been expended less than
cameras
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. The least
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expenditure
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ware
perfume
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by almost 145,000
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. On the other
hands
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, France consumers had
higher
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a higher
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expenditure
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for
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on
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Cars
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by exactly 400,000
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while
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computers’
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computers
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consuming
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expended less slightly than
cars
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’ consuming.
Books
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,
perfume
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and
cameras
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were less
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expenditure
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respectively which
were
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was
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exactly 300,000
pounds
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to buy
books
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, 200,000
pounds
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to get
perfume
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and 150,000 to obtain
cameras
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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