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In school, girls tend to choose art subjects, boys tend to choose science subjects. What causes lead to this situation? Do you think this should be changed?

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Introduction
In modern days there are vast changes happening especially in
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compared
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.Many of the
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chosen
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Art
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boys
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 are
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interested
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subjects
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circumstances
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 situation and
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their
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 are very strong both mentally and physically than
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 are always willing to learn
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new things
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new things
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new ideas.parents and teachers
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 played a major role
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to encourage
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. due to advanced technologies and
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 growth
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 are intended to take
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subjects
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 rather than
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arts
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if the
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choosen
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chosen
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academic
 subject as
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thus
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 they will get the strength to develop new ideas in all aspects. Today
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Technology
 is spreading tremendously so the one who has
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acquired
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knowldege
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knowledge
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 able to create and
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innovate
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methods
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on
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on the other hand
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,
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 are interested to take
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arts
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because
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 are easy to read and understand when compared with
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subjects
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.Commonly
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 will have to do the full practice
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 the classroom with minimal expenditure.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 and
science
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subjects
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 are very important to learn and get
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knowledge.

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