You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, - describe the training course you want to do - explain what the company could do to help you - say how the course will be useful for your job Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#work #company #advertisement #course #job #manager #sir #madam

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Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings of the day! I am writing

this

letter to seek your approval for an advanced axis control training

course

from FANUC which will be useful for my job at Milacron LLC. A training

course

titled 'Pro-Axis Control' was recently announced in the Fanuc media newsletter which has made me curious about

this

unique learning opportunity. It is a 5-day training

course

that aims to cover the fundamentals as well as industrial applications of their linear motor solutions.

This

in-person training

course

will be held at their state-of-the-art innovation centre in Chicago. The company can submit my application along with a $1000 fee payment by the end of December 2022 to successfully register for the training event. I plan to use our corporate travel portal in order to manage a rental car and a hotel accommodation booking at a discounted rate. I believe that participating in

this

training

course

will be a good investment of the company's time and resources which can help us in our upcoming projects. As per our recent discussion with the Director of Technology, adding the knowledge of axis control is a key to success in the field of electric-hybrid machine applications. Looking forward to hearing from you! Yours faithfully, Darshit Nimavat

Submitted by vimzauthority on Fri Dec 16 2022

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

210 words

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