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Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money. This practice can act as an incentive for some but may also have a negative impact on others. To what extent is this style of management effective? Are there better ways of encouraging employees to work hard?

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CHAIRPERSONS
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ESSY
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ARGUMENT
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CONSEQUNCE
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CONSEQUENCE
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AWARD
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EMPLOY
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SEEKING
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ENCOURAGING
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 ALL EMPLOYEES
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CONTRIBUTION
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ONE
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MEANS
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EMPLOY
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COMPANY
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,THE EMPLOYERS HAVE ANOTHER CHOICE THE WILL satisfaction THA ALL BY
PREPER
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PREPPER
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TICETS
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TICKETS
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FIMALES
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FEMALES
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FURTHERMORE
THE promotion PLAY A BIG ROLE OF
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MOTIVATION
 CONTRIBUTION.UNDOUBTEDLY THE MAIN
GOOL
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GOAL
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SHE
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IS BULDING
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BULDING
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BUILDING
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VALUBEL
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VALUABLE
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NUMPER
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NUMBER
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WORKER
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WORKERS
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. IN CONCLUSION, TO SUMMRAZT IT AFTER A CAREFUL ANALYSIS OF BOTH POIN VIEWS,THE MONY IS THE BEST INCENTIVE BY
AGREE
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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