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The bar charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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The charts represent data about what graduate and postgraduate
students
 of the UK did after leaving college rather than
full-time
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job
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jobs
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 in 2008. Overall, it is clear that the number of
students
 aiming for
further
 study was higher in both graduate and postgraduate
students
, while the voluntary task was the least significant among them in the given period. Among graduates, 29,665
students
 thought
aboutfurther
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about further
 study which was the highest among all four options.
In contrast
, the number of
students
 in the voluntary work segment was 3500, which was the least popular destination for graduates.
However
, the figures for part-time work and unemployment seemed quite similar (17735 and 16235 respectively). The number of postgraduates who decided to
dofurther
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do further
 study was 2725 and 2535 were aimed for part-time work. Like the graduate, voluntary struggle appeared to be less popular among postgraduates and the figure was only 345.
Lastly
, 1625 postgraduates of the UK were not in the workforce in the given period.
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