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In some companies, social skills are given priority over qualifications when screening their possible employees. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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When screening potential
employees
, qualifications are less important than social
skills
.
However
, there are several advantages and disadvantages
of
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this
 situation.
Hence
, I will discuss both sides and deliver my opinion below. Social
skills
 are the predominant factor that helps
employees
 to adapt quickly to a new workplace environment. It will be challenging for those who are shy and afraid to make a movement for small talk in order to create a good atmosphere among co-workers. Working with people requires
a
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high communication
skill
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 to deliver ideas and needs precisely.
For instance
, if there is a fresh graduate who shows
lack
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 of gestures,
such
us
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 cannot fully confident when
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 ideas, co-workers will doubt their ability to do a task.
Also
, being
intiative
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initiative
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also
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the
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 of having
a
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good social
skill
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skills
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. People who know the challenges that are
facing
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 by the
company
 can give a great solution.
Hence
, there will a chance to get a promotion.
On the contrary
, there are disadvantages
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 focusing too much on social
skills
.
Employees
 will get overwhelmed with the
amount
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 of tasks when they do not have any specific
skills
 to help them finish them.
Also
, having great
skills
 that match
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the
company
's needs can give
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chances
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 to get a high salary and move to a higher-level position.
Furthermore
, academic validation is needed to check the responsibility of
employees
 to finish their studies, which can be dug deeper in the interview process. Checking
employees
' study backgrounds and abilities can help a
company
 assess and consider whether they will be capable of being involved in
company's
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cultures
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 and be responsible for a particular job. In conclusion, social
skills
 are essential to have great networks with people from different positions.
However
, having a specific skill that can benefit a
company
 is more crucial because it can give many opportunities that I have mentioned above.
Thus
, I'm not convinced that social
skills
 are more important than qualifications when choosing potential
employees
.
Submitted by annisadevinaa on

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