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You are working in a school. Write a letter to the Principal to recommend your friend for the position of sports teacher in your school. In your letter – say how long you have known him/her – describe his/her qualifications – explain why you think he/she would be suitable for the job.

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 is to certify that
Mr.
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 Inderpreet Singh S/O Paramjit Singh village Mand
distt
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district
 Jalandhar, Punjab has been employed as
general
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 labourer. He is working as a flat roofer
as well as rubble and other debris
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, as well as rubble and other debris,
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construction
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 site since 7 April
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 2018.
Mr.
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 Inderpreet Singh
has
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worked
part time
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 from 7 April
,
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 2018 to 15 May
,
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 2020 with
the
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 average of 30 hours
of
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a week. His monthly salary is 18,000 rupees in cash. From 16 May
,
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 2020; he has worked full time with
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 average of 46 hours per week. His monthly salary is 27000 rupees in cash. His duties
at
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this
 position include
to assist
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construction
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the construction
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engineer
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 with loading and unloading construction materials,
spray
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spraying
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 tarmac on roofs as well as
maintenance
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 of working sites and providing installation support. He is competent to take directions in English, capable to lift 50 to 80 lbs, small
machineries
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machinery
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 and follow
foreman's
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 directions.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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