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The reason that most individuals are in debt is due to the overuse and irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks should not issue credit cards unless they are completely sure of an individual’s ability to pay back their debts. To what extent do you agree with this?

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bank
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the bank
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 should check the individual background employee -job -financial While the trend of banking offers the convenience of owning
credit
cards
 is skyrocketing but
banks
 should realize that not all of their customers are able to pay back their debts. The tendency of buying luxury stuff creates a financial trap for many
unemployment
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.
Bank
 as a
credit
 issuer should verify the debtor before offering the benefit of
credit
cards
.
This
 is so vital to avoid over usage of
credit
cards
 and put idleness in
the
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a
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 money crisis situation.
For example
,
Bank
 Central Asia (BCA) has released new minimum income regulation which has been implemented as a loan standard for all
banks
 in Asia Region.
This
 rule has
succecced
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succeed
succeeded
 to find the correct debtors who are able to pay the loan and give revenue to
banks
.
In addition
, age should be
other requirement
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another requirement
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 for
banks
 before
give
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giving
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 the access to
credit
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the credit
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 card system.
Banks
 must state to the debtor that
permission
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a permission
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 letter from the
guarntor
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guarantor
 is one of
main
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the main
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requirement
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requirements
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 before
banks
 approve their
credit
cards
. Many youths below 21 are interested who do not have
salary
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a salary
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 create
credit
cards
 without their
parents
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parent's
parents'
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 permission.
As a result
 due to the benefits provided by
banks
.
As a result
, they can not pay the loan and bring
financial
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a financial
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problem
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problems
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 to their parents who as their money
guarantor
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guarantors
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.
For example
, in 2022, few high school students
Bank
 give
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