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The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the differences between two different age groups in Canada in terms of post-school qualifications. overall,it can be seen that the number of young Canadian
degree
 holders increased twice as much as the old folk.
in addition
, from both age groups, a majority
holds
Correct subject-verb agreement
hold
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 a
degree
 in Social science,Arts.
Thus
, social science and arts was the most popular
degree
 among young and old graduates.
That is
 , 20% and 21%, respectively.
Further
, the
second
 most popular
degree
 among young Canadians aged 25-35 was Administration and almost the same proportion of those aged between 35-45 too chose the same
degree
. With 19% and 15% , respectively.
Moreover
, the engineering
degree
 wasn't popular among the younger Canadian crowd as only 9% of them studied that
degree
.Whilst, almost twice the proportion of people (19%) in the age category 45-55 did the same
degree
.
On the other hand
,many young graduates majored in science,maths and computers (18%) , contrasting with the minority of the older
degree
 holders of 10%.
Furthermore
, comparing the 2 groups it is aptly clear that humanities and nursing have increased in popularity with older graduates.
That is
 , 5% and 11%,respectively.
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