You are looking for a part-time job over the holiday period. In your local paper, you have seen an advertisement for a position in a bookshop. Write a letter of application to the shop owner. In your letter ⚫ say why you are writing ⚫ say why you feel you are suitable for the position say when you can attend an interview Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear Manager, I am writing
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my interest in the job vacancy at your bookshop and discovered
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a local newspaper.
Moreover
, I am a full-time university student completing the hotel management course.
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, I previously worked in a hotel as a crew member for a year but, my workplace was far away from my residential place.
Furthermore
, I can concentrate on my studies and
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my work and academic part.
Hence
, I decided to quit work a month ago.
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, I have some experience as a cashier and as an associative, who manages the stocks and
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them on the shelves. During, my time as a cashier, I developed a handful of skills
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, being patient, how to handle customers and how to work in a fast-paced environment.
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, I think I am aware of generic duties or responsibilities. I would appreciate it if I get an opportunity to discuss
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with you. I am available to interview at your earliest convenience. Thank you I look forward to hearing from you Best Regards
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Sincerely Sandeep Kaur
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task response
The letter partially addresses the requirements of the task. It does not fully elaborate on the reasons for suitability and availability for interview.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, but the body of the letter lacks clear organization and coherence. There is a lack of paragraph structure and transition words to show the connection between ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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