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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect among colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern era, it is irrefutable fact that companies give salaries to
employees
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 based on their education qualification and their work experience. Yet there are some group of people who believes that employee
salary
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 must be same as compare to other workers whereas I disagree with
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 notion and my views will be discussed in the
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 essay.
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 with, the
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 and foremost reason for my disagreement is if the pay scale is the same among all workers
then
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 it is unfair to highly professional
employees
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such
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 as an engineer and accountants. They have to face multiple struggles in their life to become a professional employee in any field. Whereas other labourers are not much educated so
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 is a vast difference between educated
employees
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 and uneducated people.
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, if the employer does not provide high salaries to skilled
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then
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 they might be left jobs and the company goes into big trouble.
On the other hand
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, few people told that each employee’s
salary
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 must be same. If
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 thing happens in any company
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 workers not only work more efficiently but
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 are a supporting worker to each other.
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, one research conducted by The Times of India found that 70% of labours support each other in the workplace and the only reason behind
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 is the same
salary
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 as all labours. In conclusion, there is a right to demand a high
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 for those who have sufficient knowledge about any specific field. If they do not get a good job with a handsome
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 there is a total waste of time and money they spent to be a skilled worker.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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