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the expenditure on six customer goods(personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys, and photographic films) in four European countries namelly, Germany, Italy, France, and Britain.

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The chart below illustrates the expenditure on six customer goods(personal
stereos
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, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys, and photographic films) in four European countries namely, Germany, Italy, France, and Britain. The
amount
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 spent on consumer goods is calculated in Sterling
pounds
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. Overall, The British community has the greatest expenditure among all six consumer products while Germany accounts for the least when compared to the four countries. Generally, people spent the most on photographic film and the least on CDs. The Germans have spent the same
amount
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(150
thousand
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 Sterling
pounds
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) in buying personal
stereos
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 and tennis racquets. Meanwhile, the least
amount
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 of money has been used to buy personal
stereos
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 which are around 150
thousand
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 Sterling
pounds
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. The French and the Italians have spent an equal
amount
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 of 150
thousand
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 Sterling
pounds
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 on toys. The British have spent the same
amount
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 on personal
stereos
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 and on tennis racquets. Only the expenditure on photographic film and toys has surpassed 165
thousand
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 Sterling
pounds
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 and
that is
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 done by the British.

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