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Write a letter informing the e-commerce online store customer desk about a damaged product you received

#e-commerce #store #customer #desk #product
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to complain about the poor quality of
product
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the product
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 I recently received from your company.Two days ago I bought you
washing
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a washing
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 machine and had problems with it machine.
Firstle
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Firstly
First
,after
installation
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,installation
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is
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it
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 did not work. Started to publish strange
noice
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noise
.These sounds
was
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were
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 from drums.
Yestarday
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Yesterday
 I and my friend Mukhammad Joseph carried
washing
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the washing
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 machine in service, workers said
me
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to me
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, was
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a marriage
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marriage
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married
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 from
factory
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the factory
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.I want
from
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apply
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you
change
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to change
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me
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apply
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my product.Or I will complain to your store to the police.
Still
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,Still
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 you should
me
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apply
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return
twenty five
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twenty-five
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precent
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per cent
from
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of
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product
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the product
a product
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it
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if it
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 turns out 100 dollars.I think we agreed.Please send him
answer
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an answer
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me
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to me
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in
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via
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 google mail or to my number. I
seriosly
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seriously
 hope that my letter will not create any ill
feeling
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feelings
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 between us.Thank you for
understuding
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understanding
. Youth sincerely, Cristiano Ronaldo
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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