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Write a letter informing the e-commerce online store customer desk about a damaged product you received

#e-commerce #store #customer #desk #product
Dear Sir, I
am write
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 you because of
this
 recently
i
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 have bought
TV
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a TV
the TV
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 in your online shop but it does not
working
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this
 TV does not turn on. I do not know why. You have to make the delivery so that they work faster so that buyers are not dissatisfied and you should check if
this
 TV is working or not. if you haven't solved
this
 problem
then
 customers will not
by
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buy
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 from you. I have
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an idea
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idea
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from
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for
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 you and your online shop. If you advertise your online store
in
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on
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 Instagram and your goods are
well bought
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,
this
 is
good
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a good
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 idea for you.
As
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 more advertising and more buyers because of
this
, you have to advertise a lot. You can
coming
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come
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 up with
a new logotypes
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new logotypes
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.
This
 is
mine
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my
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 idea and request for you think you
are solved
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have solved
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this problems
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this problem
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. I am waiting for your answer. Yours faithfully
Ozod
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Ozone
 Elmuradov
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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