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The consumption of the world's resources (oil, and water etc.) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

In the developing world, it is undeniable that the demand for exploiting the world’s
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 as oil
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 and
water
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water,
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 is increasing. Overconsumption,
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, may lead to several consequences related to nature and the environment.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes of these problems
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 overpopulation and agricultural
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,
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 suggest some suitable solutions for these reasons. The foremost reason for overconsumption is overpopulation.
According to
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 Worldometer, the current population is 7,9 billion
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, and
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 number is increasing unstoppably every second. The higher
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 of living
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people
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, the higher the material demands will be.
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 the high need for daily materials, more factories are built to exploit
resources
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 to produce devices and types of equipment in order to
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 community life quality.
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, natural
resources
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 would be depleted since many
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the
resources
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 are non-renewable,
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 as coal, bronze, metal quarries and so on.
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, the depletion of natural
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 will continue as long as the world population increases. Another cause that results in over-exploiting is logging.
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 the need for expanding areas for residential living or agricultural purposes, citizens and governments chop down trees and
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 them with houses, residential places or factories for production. These decisions might lead to many drastic natural disasters
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 as drought
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 and flooding. Even worse, the ecosystem will be unbalanced
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 the lack of natural habitats.
According to
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 much research, deforestation is the main reason that leads to flooding and heavily affects the national economy
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 living quality. A possible solution to tackle
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 problem is to use alternative
resources
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 to produce daily materials.
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 of using plastic to manufacture disposable plastic bags or plates, we can use decomposable or eco-friendly materials
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 as paper to reduce the exploitation of oil
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 plastic waste. In terms of decreasing the rate of deforestation, the government can zone residential areas and provide legal areas just for agricultural purposes, in order to conserve natural places for living creatures.
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, various actions can be taken to solve the problem of resource overconsumption. If people all around the world join hands in using eco-friendly products and buying economically, the rate of resource consumption would be decreased.

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Plan your essay. Put one main idea in each paragraph and link them with a fit word.
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Use simple and clear words. Check big words or phrases that might be hard.
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Give more proof for each idea. Use facts, not only feel words.
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Finish with a short end that says what to do.
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You set the topic in the first line and you give a plan.
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You use a real example to show a point.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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