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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart demonstrates the total
number
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 of
minutes
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 which were called by British people in three categories (Local- fixed
line
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, National and international-fixed
line
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, mobiles) between 1995 and 2002. Units are in billions As
it
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apply
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observed, the greatest
number
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 of
minutes
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 are in the local-fixed
line
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, which hit a peak in the middle of the period and
then
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 moderately declined.
In addition
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, British people called slightly fewer on mobiles than fixed-
line
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, showing that mobile was
fewer
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less
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 popular among them. In terms of local-fixed
line
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, it witnessed an upward trend from 1995 to 1999 with the smallest
number
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 of
minutes
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, at just over 70 billion and the largest
number
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 of
minutes
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, at exactly 90 billion.
However
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, there was a gradual decrease between 1999 and 2002 at the same amount as
the
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at the
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 start of the period.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 called by British people on the national and international – fixed-
line
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 increased steadily from slightly above 30 to approximately 60. The pattern was similar for mobiles with the difference that the values were between just over 0 and about 40.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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