The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given diagram illustrates the number of people in 2011 who studied art
in
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the
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UK university.
Overall
, there are
men
and women students. Ladies have more numbers than
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gentlemen
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in 5 subjects. There are 5 majors that have a big quantity
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girls, Linguistic, Philosophy, English language and literature, History and Archaeology and Communication and media study. The biggest subject is language. Art and design are more fascinating for males, and the number is bigger than
females
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. They up to 190 people for
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the guy
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guy
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and 170 for
female
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females
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. In that
case
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they have 20 ratios to each other. The largest proportion of women is in the English language. They reach 250 females and 230 males. Philosophy and History Archaeology are the lowest numbered in
men
. but on the other
side
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women are still outnumbered by
men
.
This
means female is more active to choose their major because the proportion is bigger than
men
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • art-related subjects
  • gender distribution
  • predominate
  • significant
  • gender imbalances
  • percentages
  • comparison
  • balanced distribution
  • data
  • figures
  • trends
  • popular
  • least popular
  • subject choices
  • analyze
  • overview
  • summarize
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