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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line chart depicts the proportion of
books
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 that were borrowed from four libraries which are surveyed monthly,
while
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 the pie graph indicates the
percentage
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 of the genre from each book. In general, all of the
number
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 of
books
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 lent revealed
upward
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an upward
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 tendency,
whereas
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 only Ryeslip had a downward trend.
In addition
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, there was
a
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the
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 largest
percentage
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 of Fiction in the graph than in other types. In detail, west eaton and church mount
were
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rose gradually from June to September which began
on
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with
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 50
books
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,
then
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 continued to grow until 150. Sutton Wood
also
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 followed a similar pattern,
nevertheless
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 with fluctuated wildly from 250 to approximately 270 in July,
then
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 surprisingly experienced a decline in the next month to 100 and became 300 in the
last
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 period.
In contrast
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, ryeslip had a gradual
decreased
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 from 300 to around 170
books
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.
On the other hand
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, based on the genre, The reader who
love
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loves
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 fiction was 42%, and
this
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 was the biggest amount from
four
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the four
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 libraries compared to others. The second enormous
percentage
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 was biography which was 19%.
According to
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this
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, the rest of them had
small
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a small
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percentage
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, which
were
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was
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 38% if combined.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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