In country where there is a high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hop of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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percentage of
people
unemploy, and get
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support
from governments. Though there are some limitations
for
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application
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support
, it still
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many
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problems
for
residents
of living.
According to
many facts in countries, there are several difficult situations and I
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agree that
people
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support
because of their education, I will express my ideas in
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easy
.
Firstly
, in big
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consentient
like America, Europe and Australia
for instance
,
residents
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in
different
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area
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have different rules to follow. In other
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,
people
from
north
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of Australia may get the
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support
if they lose their
job
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of none quit by themselves;
however
, citizens in the south, cannot get any aid if they do not
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that they leave the
job
because the company fire them directly without reasons.
Secondly
, those
residents
who lose jobs are more or
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less
have less
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, so it is hard for workers to find someone to help them apply for the application to get aid
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the governments
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governments
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government
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. On one hand, the governments in every country
has
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built a
support
system to help
residents
look for a
job
,
for example
, most
of
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European
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countries have
professional
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a professional
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office to assist their citizens
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in
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training
course for
being
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job
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seeker and match
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employers and employees afterwards.
On the other hand
, after training the
center
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will give each
memeber
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member
a certification to prove that they have learned the skills. Though it does not count as credit as in the university, it helps
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of
people
get new jobs without
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their background. The
job
center
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centre
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will help members practice
interview
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interviews
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and coach them to find
a
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suitable work;
however
, there are some bugs in the system, some
people
apply to be a
job
seeker
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seekers
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, but they play tricks to fail their interviews and get the
peper
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paper
to prove that they need to continue training. Meanwhile, it wastes
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money and time to train
people
who have the same
attutitude
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attitude
as them. In conclusion, though there are some benefits which
makes
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people
back to normal life, there are
also
many drawbacks to make
people
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lazy to find jobs and over using the systems which may lead
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systems
crush
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in near future.
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