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big salary is much more important than job satisfaction agree or disagree writting task in ielts

#salary #job #satisfaction #ielts
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Nowdays
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 People are more concerned about wages and business achievement. Both are Equally Important to a Human
Being
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 growth. From my point of ,View
i
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 disagree with
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 statement because if we don'
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 have work happiness it will affect growth in different ways without career joy we are working in a company will lead to career loss, no concentration won'
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 be there
while
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 working,
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mental
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 pressure of a worker will lead to serious health issues
for example
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 diseases like Hypertension, Blood pressure is the cause of
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. A big salary gives you more money but we can'
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 enjoy it because of our stressful
soul
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. without any ,happiness if we got much money, there is no meaning in that. Sometimes restless person's mind is a devil's workshop.
now days
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 most people are under treatment for depression, Anxiety, and even Suicide now common everywhere. most of the reasons are related to stress, People Don'
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 know to Handle a Stressful heart. Everyone runs behind the money. if we are getting a high salary that much work
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 will be there. so if we know to manage these two together
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 a great achievement in life In ,Conclusion I disagree with
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 statement,
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moreover
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 both are needed for
person's
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a person's
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 happy life. if the salary is less it will affect our activity, if activity achievement is not there, that will fall under unhappy life. So both play equally important to
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 growth
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