The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two charts illustrate how working adults spent their own time on various activities in a specific country over a 50-year period.
Overall
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, the percentage of time employed on activities related to work always showed a rise,
while
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the one involving hobbies or resting followed different trends. It is evident that each day, more than a third of it, was spent
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1958 and 2008, even though the percentage drastically increased by 9% in 2008. Not only did the working days become longer, but
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commuting to the workplace, which
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rose significantly from 2% to 8%. In regard to hobbies, the ratio of hours utilized for other interests or playing sports and relaxing at home followed the same upward trend as working activities, reaching 8% and 13% respectively.
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, sleep, which was the second favourite activity in 1958 (32%), and going out with family and friends went down to 25% and 6%. The highest decline was counted on going out by 13%.
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