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You are the manager of a restaurant that was received aletter of complaint about poor service from a member of your staff

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Dear
mr
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 or madam I am
wrting
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writing
 a letter to you to give information about my apology which my
staff
 has mistake and poor
service
.
Firstly
,
i
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apology
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 for
this
embarrasing
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embarrassing
 and rare
occurence
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occurrence
 at my
restaurant
. My
staff
 of member will remove at
restaurant
staff
.
Meanwhile
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 it is a common phenomenon and indisputable fact that
,
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staff
 members prepare for good
service
. But
i
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 do not think, my
staff
 indicated poor
service
. The most
indespensable
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indispensable
 and outstanding facet which is ought to be inferred is that
,
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 in all
seriousness
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i
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 would like to offer you with
family
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your family
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 a free meal for five people at
restaurant
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the restaurant
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. I
sure
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, you visit my
restaurant
 again and
i
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 promise my
staff
indicate
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 quality
service
 to you. Please accept my
aplogies
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apologies
apologise
 once again Yours faithfully Jony
jekson
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Jackson
 Manager of the seaside inn
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