The diagram shows the different stages in the production of woolen goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates one particular way to produce
wool
to manufacture carpets or jackets or for knitting. Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that this
process comprises 4 main stages: collecting, drying, spinning, and storing for retail.
The first stage of this
process is to shear the sheep to obtain its fur. Secondly
, it is washed with water before being dried. Next,
dried fur is spun with the product being wool
and the byproduct being a string, which is then
sent to factories to be recycled. The tufted wool
, which is formed by many pieces of wool
, is stored in large numbers before being sold to the customers or clothing industries in the form of balls. Those balls of yarn are finally
used for knitting and manufacturing jackets and carpets.Submitted by robertasottile.rbst on
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