Task 1: The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the way in which
rainwater
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is used and transformed into drinking
water
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in an Australian town.
Overall
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, there are five main steps in
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process which
starts
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with collecting
water
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by drains and ends when drinking
water
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is used by
Australian
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in their house. What happens in
the first
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step
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is that
rainwater
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runs into the drains or gutters in each Australian’s house. Following that,
rainwater
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undergoes a
step
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of purification, where it flows into a huge storage.
As a result
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,
water
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becomes sanitary. At the storage,
rainwater
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is ready to be purified again. The next
step
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occurs when
water
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runs into a
water
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treatment, which aims to purify again by using chemicals
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as Chlorine.
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, pure
water
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is ensured to be hygienic. What people do in
the next
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step
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is let
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water
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run into pipes.
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, drinking
water
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is maintained by the pipes to Australia's houses for drinking or use in households.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water, step with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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