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Task 1: The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the way in which
rainwater
 is used and transformed into drinking
water
 in an Australian town.
Overall
, there are five main steps in
this
 process which
starts
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 with collecting
water
 by drains and ends when drinking
water
 is used by
Australian
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Australians
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 in their house. What happens in
the first
step
 is that
rainwater
 runs into the drains or gutters in each Australian’s house. Following that,
rainwater
 undergoes a
step
 of purification, where it flows into a huge storage.
As a result
,
water
 becomes sanitary. At the storage,
rainwater
 is ready to be purified again. The next
step
 occurs when
water
 runs into a
water
 treatment, which aims to purify again by using chemicals
such
 as Chlorine.
As a consequence
, pure
water
 is ensured to be hygienic. What people do in
the next
step
 is let
water
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 run into pipes.
Finally
, drinking
water
 is maintained by the pipes to Australia's houses for drinking or use in households.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water, step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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