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The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.

The line graph below shows the production of paper, wood pulp and sawn-wood in the UK from 1980 to 2000.
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The graph illustrates the
production
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 of three raw materials
which
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are
paper
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,
wood
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pulp
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 and
sawn-
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sawn wood
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wood
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 in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 for two decades from 1980 to 2000. for
paper
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 and packaging,from 1980
paper
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 till 2000 and packaging was the highest and more than double produced as compared to the other two products.from
the
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1980 to 1990 its
production
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 has steadily grown meanwhile,
wood
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pulp
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 and sawn-
wood
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 manufacturing has significantly dropped from 1980 to 1990.in the
last
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 decade of
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the 19th
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19th century
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19th-century
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paper
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 and packaging manufacturing increased sharply to around 100
million
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tons
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 increased till the end of 2000. with reference to
wood
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pulp
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,In 1980 its manufacturing has been significantly declining and decreased
for
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 200
million
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tons
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 to 150
million
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tons
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 till the
last
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 of1990,in the next 10 years from 1990 to 200 its
production
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 has been
further
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 decreasing even though
other
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the other
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 two products have increased their
production
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 in
this
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 period. with reference to
swan-
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swan wood
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wood
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, in the 2nd
last
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 decade of 19th-century swan-
wood
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 has slightly decreased in
production
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 to 150
million
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tons
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 almost equal to
the
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wood
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pulp
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production
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 even though its
production
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 has not fallen like
wood
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pulp
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 since now both are equal.In the next ten years sawn
wood
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has
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recovered and grown its
production
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 steadily and reached the 1980
production
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 amount by 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, paper, wood, pulp, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • production
  • paper
  • wood pulp
  • sawn-wood
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • significant
  • turning point
  • correlation
  • inverse relationship
  • environmental policy
  • demand
  • technological advancements
  • implications
  • projections
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