plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The two plans below illustrate a map of a
sports
centre
that
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located in a university
,
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and the changes that will occur to the
centre
after renovation.
Overall
, the
sports
centre
size will increase in the future compared to the current size.
Moreover
, the outdoor courts will be upgraded where
a new activity courts
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will be added, and an extra big pool will be built and a small café.  as per the old
layout
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the gym is located at the north, back side of the 25m swimming pool,
where
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in the future plan the gym will be bigger.
In addition
, at the east of the
gym
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there will be two dance studios to be added in the new layout.
Furthermore
, the reception room location will not be
change
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according to
the new design,
however
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two extra changing rooms will be added
on
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different places, one will be located
at
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the
south east
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of the reception, and the other one will be
at
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the
south west
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of the reception. At
this
time there is no
sports
shop available at the university
sports
centre
, but as per the new
plan
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one shop will be built
in
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the left side of the entrance.
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