With the development of tourism, more and more cheap and discount fights are made available to holidaymakers. Some environmental groups claim that governments should tax air traffic more because its growth has a tremendous impact on the environment.

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tourism has been growing rapidly and providing many jobs.
Inorder
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to attract customers from
this
trend airlines are giving more and more discounts between popular tourist destinations, observing
this
some
enviromentalists
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environmentalists
argue that government should
tax
air
traffic
as it hugely results in
negetive
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negative
effects on
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enviroment
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environment
. In
this
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we shall discuss why
air
traffic
should not be taxed more and how
air
travel
generates less pollution compared to road
travel
. As our country
progressing
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towards developed country more and more
people
are increasingly started spending
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entertainement
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entertainment
, one
of
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such
spending is travelling.
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inroder
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in order
to be involved in
this
growing
industry
airlines started giving huge discounts to major tourist destinations, so that
people
take
air
travel
compared to roadways or railways. Now managing
a
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airline
business is
a
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much more complicated than one can imagine, most
airline
run
in
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losses,
however
given the growth rate at which
people
are
perfering
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preferring
performing
air
travel
the
industry
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future is good. Now if
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
starts charging
tax
on
this
these companies in
airline
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the airline
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business would have no option except to transfer
this
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additional charges to customers,
this
results in increasing
price
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which would result in lesser
people
perfering
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preferring
performing
air
travel
,
further
reducing the
industry
growth rate making it impossible for
airline
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to make
profit
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.
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to
this
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the fuel burnt in
aeroplane
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aeroplanes
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leaves very less residual when compared to petrol that buses and cars burn to run the vehicle resulting in less pollution. Given the Indian
middle class
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situation it is
dream
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the dream
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of many
people
to
travel
in
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aeroplane
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atleast
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at least
once in
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life-time
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it is government moral to keep
air
tickets affordable. In conclusion, we have discussed how
air
traffic
tax
will make
air
travel
unaffordabel
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unaffordable
affordable
and
also
airline
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the airline
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industry
generates
comparetively
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comparatively
less pollution than roadways, so government should not
tax
air
traffic
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