The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building 

purposes. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given illustration demonstrates the process by which
cement
is made
,
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and later used in the concrete for construction work.
Overall
, what stands out from the diagrams is that
cement
production is a multi-stage task requiring only two raw materials,
while
creating concrete needs a number of ingredients, and is completed in just a single step. Focusing first on how
cement
is made,
initially
, limestone and clay are passed through a crusher to make a powder which is
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mixed properly.
This
mixture is now rotated and heated in a cylindrical pipe with an external heating source.
Finally
,
cement
is obtained after finely grinding
this
mix and later packed in
cement
bags. Turning to concrete production, in a giant concrete mixer all the components are added in fixed proportions. Half of
this
is gravel, which
are
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small stones,
whereas
the earlier produced
cement
and sand account for 25% and 15%, respectively, and the remaining percentage
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by
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water.
This
is
then
rotated continuously to get concrete which can be used for building purposes.
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