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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about the value of
Export
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earnings
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 in Five sectors including (
petroleum
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products
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, Engineered
goods
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,
Gems
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 and
jewellery
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, Agricultural
products
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, and Textiles) in the year 2015 and 2016. units used in
billion
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dollars
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.
while
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 the Table explains The
change
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 in
Export
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 values represented in
percentage
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 units.
Overall
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, it can be seen that The highest profits were made up From
petroleum
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products
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 and Engineered
goods
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, but the fewer
Earnings
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 was made From Textiles and agricultural
products
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 .
furthermore
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, in the
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table the
percentage
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change
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 was high in all
Export
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 values Category except for
Gems
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 and
jewellery
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. In 2015, The
petroleum
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products
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Earnings
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 were slightly above 60
billion
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Dollars
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. and
then
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 increased to reach about 64
billion
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Dollars
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 in the following year.The profits from Engineerineared
goods
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 is about 57
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015. After ,that it was raised to around 61
billion
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dollars
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.
However
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, the value of
Gems
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 and
Jewellery
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 is approximately 44
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016 and
then
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 start to decrease to just above 40
billion
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dollars
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 after one year.
On the other hand
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, Agricultural
products
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 profit stay Constant without any
change
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 in their value about 31
billion
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dollars
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. The Textiles
earnings
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 were approximately 25
billion
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dollars
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 and Clearly increased to about 31
billion
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dollars
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. From the
,
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table we can find that
,
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the highest
percentage
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change
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 was made by the textile sector at 15.24 %.
In addition
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, the
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 in Values of
Petroleum
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products
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, Engineering
goods
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 and Agriculturcultural
products
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 were represented as 3%,8.5%and 0.81% respectively.
Whereas
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 the lowest
percentage
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change
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 was
on
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gems
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 and
jewellery
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export
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 at 5.18%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, petroleum, products, goods, gems, jewellery, billion, dollars, change, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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