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Band 5.5

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrated how rainwater can be converted to potable drinking
water
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. A particular town in Australia utilizes
this
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 kind of method. Over, rainwater is the main component
for
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of
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this
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 process to
occure
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occur
.
This
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 method goes through several filtrations and
water
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 chemical
treatment
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treatments
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 before it can be
dispatch
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dispatched
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 as
an
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apply
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edible drinking
water
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 for consumption.
It
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In
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 detail, houses with drain pipes
collecte
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collect
collected
water
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 when the rain pours. The rainwater will
then
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 go down through another pipe
that is
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 connected
into
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to
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 a
water
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 filtration machine. After the filtration, the
rainwatr
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rainwater
 is stored over a certain period of time.
Afterwhich
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After which
, it will be subjected
for
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to
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water
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 treatment by adding chemicals that are intended to eliminate extra microorganisms that might still be lingering in the filtered
water
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.
On
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In
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 the latter part, the treated
water
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 will
then
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 travel all the way up via a narrow pipeline. In
this
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stage
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 it is ready for consumption
for
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by
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 the mass.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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