The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages
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The charts above inform us about the British
students
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at a specific college with the ability to speak other
languages
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in contrast
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to English in 2000 and 2010.
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, Spanish won the chart in both years by falling under the 30%-40% rate.
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, Germany is one of the lowest representing the 10% rate mark in both the 2000s and 2010s. Discussing the 2000s chart, 30% of
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speak Spanish only, following that, 15% speak French. Only 10% of the
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know german and around 25% of
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combined speak either 1 or 2 other
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. That leaves us with 20% of pupils, who speak only English. Increasing by 5%, Spanish still makes up for the top by reaching 35%.
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French got decreased by 5%, making it on the same level as German, which stayed resting at 10%. 35% of the
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either speak one or two other
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combined and only 10% speak no other
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