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the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england
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describe
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 the percentage of British University student in England, who knows different languages verbally in
year
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the year
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 2000 & 2010. In 2000, 20% of
student
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students
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 recognise only English and no other
language
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 but In 2010, only 10%
not
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were not
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 able to talk in English.
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,
according to
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 the
graph
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 we can state that German
is use
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is used
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fewer
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less
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 and
Spanish
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 is spoken more in both years. In
case
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the case
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 of speaking foreign languages apart from English, In 2000 30% and 35%
student
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of student
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 in 2010 is able to speak
Spanish
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.
Spanish
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 is the
language
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acknowledge
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 in
this
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 given both years. There are
another
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other
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 languages and French data is given, that illustrate apart from
Spanish
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 another
language
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 usage is 15% in 2000 but only French value is 20% and in 2010 another
language
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is vocalize
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is vocalized
is vocalizing
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 20%.
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French
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the French
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language
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 is less used.
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