the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

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the percentage of British University student in England, who knows different languages verbally in

year

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2000 & 2010. In 2000, 20% of

student

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recognise only English and no other

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but In 2010, only 10%

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able to talk in English.

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we can state that German

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fewer

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and

Spanish

is spoken more in both years. In

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of speaking foreign languages apart from English, In 2000 30% and 35%

student

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in 2010 is able to speak

Spanish

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this

given both years. There are

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languages and French data is given, that illustrate apart from

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usage is 15% in 2000 but only French value is 20% and in 2010 another

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is vocalize

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20%.

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French

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language

is less used.

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