the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england

the chart below shows the proportion of british students at one university in england
The Chart Below
describe
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the percentage of British University student in England, who knows different languages verbally in
year
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the year
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2000 & 2010. In 2000, 20% of
student
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students
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recognise only English and no other
language
but In 2010, only 10%
not
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were not
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able to talk in English.
Overall
,
according to
the
graph
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we can state that German
is use
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fewer
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less
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and
Spanish
is spoken more in both years. In
case
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the case
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of speaking foreign languages apart from English, In 2000 30% and 35%
student
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in 2010 is able to speak
Spanish
.
Spanish
is the
language
acknowledge
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in
this
given both years. There are
another
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languages and French data is given, that illustrate apart from
Spanish
another
language
usage is 15% in 2000 but only French value is 20% and in 2010 another
language
is vocalize
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20%.
However
French
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the French
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language
is less used.
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