More and more people are working from home rather then at workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views ans give your own opinion.

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In the modern era, telecommuting has become a controversial topic. Some people opine that it is beneficial for workers and their families if they
work
from home. But others believe that it causes more stress in
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. I will discuss both prospects and my own point of view in
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paragraphs. To commence with, the biggest advantage of working from home is that it saves
time
and
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mind
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because employees don't have to commute to and from
work
.
Moreover
, they don't need to spend money on private and public transportation for travelling.
Moreover
, they can utilize that
time
for any side business and earn more money.
Furthermore
, it
provies
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provides
the opportunity to spend more
time
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with
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family
mambers
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members
.
For example
, they can drop off their lids
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school and pick them up in their free
time
.
On the other hand
side, there are only
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cons of working from home
such
as
worker
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workers
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need a
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quiet
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pleace
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place
to set up
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a workstation
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workstation
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which may not
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if they have small kids. Sometimes, other people
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them every now and
then
. So, it is hard to make a
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balance. Moving
further
,
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it
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may be
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extra
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an extra
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burden on
employees
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pockets, if companies don't provide
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the necessary
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equipments
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.
In addition
to
this
, it may cut down the bond with
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world, which may
leads
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to depression.
According to
a survey conducted by London university, mental diseases increase by 49 %
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due to
panademics
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pandemics
pandemic
. In my opinion, even if there are
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contrasting
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on
this
matter,
but
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I believe that
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are negligible as compared to
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the advantages
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.
Parhaps
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Perhaps
, the main benefit is the employees can
work
from any corner of
world
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, which
increase
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the
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job opportunities.
For instance
, people from India can
work
for a company located in USA or Canada. Stress caused by smart
work
is a small piece to pay for
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the vast
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amount of benefits associated with telecommuting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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