The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts compare the proportion of
water
consumption for industrial , agricultural and domestic
usage
in the six different countries , which were measured in percentage. In general , out of six nations ; four of them used most of their
water
for agricultural purposes.
Whereas
, for the other two , it was for industrial
usage
. To be specific, in
compared
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to
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; who used
water
for agriculture ; Central Asia accounted for
most
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and it constituted 88% of that sector.
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other three countries utilised 84%, 81% and 71% of
water
for agricultural purposes respectively. Meanwhile ,
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two areas made up the least
water
usage
in those four nations and it constituted 5% to 12% for industrial purposes.
Whereas
, for domestic ,
usage
it was 19% and 99% for South America and Africa .
While
Central Asia and South East Asia made up the same ratio of 7%. Meanwhile , Europe and North America were the countries that used most of their
water
for
industrial
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sector and it was 48% and 53% respectively .
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two sectors , it was 39% and 32% for agriculture .
While
for domestic , it was almost a minority .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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