The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the stages for the
production
of
cement
and concrete. In order to produce concrete it is necessary to use
cement
as an
imput
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input
. For the
production
of
cement
,
first
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it is necessary to have limestone and clay, after that both materials are transformed to powder
due to
the crusher. The powder
then
enter
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to
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apply
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the mixer to combine both
imputs
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inputs
. Once it is mixed, heat is applied in a rotating heater and
finally
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it is
grinded
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ground
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to eliminate impurities. After the
production
process is done,
cement
can be applied in bags. For
the
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apply
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concrete
production
, it is needed to combine 50% of gravel,
that
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which
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are
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is
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small stones, 25% of sand, 15%
cement
and 10% water in a concrete mixer. Once it is correctly mixed, we have concrete.
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