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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.
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The diagram illustrates the changes in the
population
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 of India and
China
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 from 2000 to 2050. In general, looking at
this
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 chart can be clearly seen the growth of
India’s
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population
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 with an upward feature,
while
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 the
population
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 of
China
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 has a downward trend.
To begin
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 with, in the year 2000
China
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 was 250 million
people
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 ahead of India and the
population
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 is continuously growing till nowadays reaching 1,425
billion
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people
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.
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, in
this
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 period
India’s
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population
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 grew rapidly from one
billion
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 to 1,350
billion
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people
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. It is assumed that in 2030
China
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’s and
India’s
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populations
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population
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 will be the same, over 1.450
billion
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people
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.
Also
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, the data indicate that
India’s
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 society will continue its upward rush,
therefore
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, overtaking
China
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 after 2030 and reaching the highest level of
population
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 1.600
billion
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people
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 in 2050. These graph projections show that the community peak in
China
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 would be around 1.450
billion
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people
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 in 2030 and decrease
subsequently
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 to 1.400
billion
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people
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 in 2050.
This
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 means that in the near
future
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India’s
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 level
population
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 will overcome
China
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 that nowadays has the highest level of
population
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.

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