The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The provided pie charts illustrate the ratio of British
students
who were able to converse in various
languages
in addition
to
English
at one university in England in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, Spanish outpaced all other
languages
in both years.
In addition
, French, German and only
English
speakers were identical in 2010. Looking at the charts in detail, 30% of British
students
were able to converse in
English
in 2000 which increased by 5% in 2010. The proportion of
students
who spoke one and two extra
languages
other than
English
was 15 and 10 respectively in the former year.
Whereas
, they both rose equally to become 20%(one extra language) and 15%(Two extra
languages
) in the latter year. Analysing the charts
further
, the ratio of
students
who didn’t know any other language except
English
and those who knew French was 20% and 15% in 2000. But, after 10 years it was observed to plummet to reach just 10% for both categories in 2010.
Lastly
, German speakers were the most consistent whose percentage remained unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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