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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers

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The majority of human life is dedicated to
work
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.so , it is obvious that a vital factor of welfare is related to
job
satisfaction
 which depends on various factors. There are several factors contributing to
job
satisfaction
 .
firstly
 an adequate salary which
meet
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meets
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 daily demands or even more a
well paid
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job
 which brings along a
luxury
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 lifestyle is a highlighted point in
job
satisfaction
 .
secondly
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 a
job
 that suits the person’s personality and interests can be another factor .
moreover
 some people have a particular emphasis on the relevance of their
job
 and field of study.
Work
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 environment has
a
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considerable importance in
job
 fulfilment . A
work
 environment which is not poisoned with intense rivalry
by contrast
a
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to a
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friendly environment with supportive colleagues.
Further
more
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apply
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being respected for what has been done and the
endeavor
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.
work
 hours can be
determinative
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a determinative
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 factor by the time there is a sickness or an emergency problem so
a flexible
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flexible work hours
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work
 hours can make a significant difference in well-being. It is not possible that all the workers
feel
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 satisfied with their jobs. In
fact
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,fact
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 finding
dream
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a dream
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job
 is not that easy . sometimes many because of life
situation
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situations
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 inevitably
loss
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 the chance of a proper education ,
hence
 they can not take a fulfilling
job
 . lack of opportunity for attaining
necessary
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 skills
of
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for
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 their dream
job
 can lead to dissatisfaction . it has been seen some people notwithstanding of fine education are not able to find a related career
due to
job
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the job
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 market recession in their field of study. In conclusion ,
it is clear that
 people are drowned
to
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in
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 their jobs which means their daily life is spent mainly at
work
. So
job
satisfaction
 is a critical agent of prosperity which is not possible for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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