The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The bar diagram illustrates, the
contribution
of several Indian economic sectors in 1950, 1970, and 1990
Overall
, 4 Fields contributed to the country's economy,
such
as Industries, self-employment, service sectors and at
last
not least agriculture.
To begin
with the Industries, the Highest
contribution
is in the
year
1970, approximately 28%. There is not much difference between the
years
1950 & 1990. 20%
contribution
in 1950 and near to 18% in 1990. Next is self-employment. In the
year
,1990 there is a huge
contribution
in
this
field compared to the other 2
years
. Near to 40% in 1990 and in 1970, 25% and only 6% in the
year
1950. Next is the service sector, there is no
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great difference between the
years
1950 and 1970. Near to 30% in the
year
1950 and near to 25% in 1970. But only 6% is in the
year
1990.
Finally
Agriculture, In the early period was a high percentage when compared to the other two
years
. 35% is in the
year
1950 and near to 20% in 1970. Gradually decreasing in the
year
1990 it is about 10%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sectoral contribution
  • economic base
  • industrialization
  • service-oriented economy
  • diversified economy
  • agriculture sector
  • industrial sector
  • services sector
  • economic policy
  • dominant sector
  • fluctuation
  • transition
  • shift
  • steady increase
  • decreasing trend
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