The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the way for collecting rainwater to reach Australian homes like useful drank.
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, the process consists of 7 stages, beginning with saving the rainwater and ending whit drinking water have different ways
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drinking and cooking. First of all, it is clear the rain dropping
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above the
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, going to small containers under the streets does a small system.
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, go to a filter to clear it from dust and etc.
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, they undergo enormous storage until needed. Wheres, in other storage the process of treatment of the water starts by adding chemical materials.
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the drinking water goes to the home in the recycling circle.
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