The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way for collecting rainwater to reach Australian homes like useful drank.
Overall
, the process consists of 7 stages, beginning with saving the rainwater and ending whit drinking water have different ways such
as,
drinking and cooking.
First of all, it is clear the rain dropping Remove the comma
apply
abovethe
houses. Correct your spelling
above the
Hence
, going to small containers under the streets does a small system.Following
this
, go to a filter to clear it from dust and etc. Therefore
, they undergo enormous storage until needed.
Wheres, in other storage the process of treatment of the water starts by adding chemical materials. finally
, thus
the drinking water goes to the home in the recycling circle.Submitted by jjooojjooo2020 on
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