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Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing • describe your suitability for this area of work • say when you can attend an interview

#restaurant #job #•explain #suitability #area #work #interview
Dear Sir or Madam, I
ma
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 Rubenel Laurino,
i
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I
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 saw your job posting yesterday on tv ads that
your
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 hiring for a
cook
. I want to apply because
that
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 position you are hiring
is
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suits my work. By the
way
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im
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I'm
 a
cook
 helper at a restaurant in
other city
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another city
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, my main job is to assist the chef
cook
 to do some chopping of meat and some vegetables, I want to apply as a
cook
,
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 because
i
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I
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 want to upgrade my knowledge of cooking on my own. I
laready
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already
 have
the
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apply
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experience
of
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apply
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cooking Asian and American foods, but my
specialty
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speciality
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 is Asia foods. but
i
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I
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 know
also
 some
italian
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Italian
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 dishes. My contract
for
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 my previous company will end
this
 coming end of
the
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apply
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month, and
im
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I'm
 very glad to apply
in
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to
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 your restaurant and work for the company. I know
i
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I
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 can help you and your team with my experience and knowledge in cooking. I can come for
interview
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an interview
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 anytime
..
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.
...
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This
 is my number 0538817200
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 Hearing from you soon. Thank you very much. Respectfully, Rubenel
Submitted by rubenellaurino on

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