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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given linear graph
illustrate
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 the rate of recycling by regional families who live in three countries
during
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over
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 10 years.
overall
, it can be seen that
proportion
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the proportion
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 of recycling in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and Germany had been increased
while
 it was reduced in France
than
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to
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 the beginning. In 2005, half of
population
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the population
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 in France recycled what they used and it
was
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declined
up
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to 30% by 2013
then
 rose again
until
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to
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 40%
during
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 2 years.
On the other
hand
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 there were 35% of people
who
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participate in recycling and slightly increased up to 40%
then
 search up to 55% and remain climbing
until
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to
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 60% in
UK
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the UK
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. Germany showed
more
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a more
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 or less similar trend with less fluctuation. Germany was the least recycling country in 2005 and it was 20% of
population
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the population
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 but it
was
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gradually
rosen
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risen
rose
 up to 55%
in
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at
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 the end of 10 years. As the proportion dropped drastically, even though there was a little rise after 2013, France become
least
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the least
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recyclers
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recycler
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 among
three
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the three
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 countries.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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