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Average percentage of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

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The pie chart illustrates the
amount
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 of different components present in the daily intake
food
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of food
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 of people in
USA
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the USA
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. In
this
analysis
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,analysis
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 four types of meals
has
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have
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 been taken into account
such
 as breakfast, lunch, snacks and dinner. There are mainly three different components whose presence dominates in daily intake meals.
Sodium
, Saturated fat and Added
sugar
. It's clearly visible that dinner is loaded with
sodium
 and saturated fat,
where as
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whereas
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 snacks contain a large portion of added
sugar
. When it comes to breakfast,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
sodium
, fat and
sugar
 is almost
in
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apply
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equal
portion
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portions
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.
Where as
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Whereas
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 in lunch
sodium
 contributes the higher 29
percentage
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per cent
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 and added
sugar
 only weighs
in
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apply
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19
percentage
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per cent
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.
Body
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 gets a larger amount of
sodium
 and saturated
sugar
 from dinner, around 43
percentage
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per cent
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 and 37
percentage
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per cent
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 respectively and added
sugar
 mainly comes from
snacks
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snack
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 intake, around 42
percentage
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per cent
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