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Popular hobbies and interest change over time and are reflection of fashion and Trends ,not indicators of what people actually want to do in their free time do you agree or disagree with this statement

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same
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the same
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 hobbies since
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childhood?Some
individual
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individuals
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 change their leisure
time
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activities
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 and interest
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time
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from time
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 to
time
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 with changes
of
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world's
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the world's
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 trends. it is believed by
majority
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the majority
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 that
people
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 engage with those
activities
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 for
time
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 passing and showing to others that they follow the latest updates of the world and it is not the burning Desire of the particular person. Even though there is some truth behind
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the above
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 statement most
people
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 like to have permanent hobbies or interests in their lives. On the one hand, some
people
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 keep changing their
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 about what they really want to do in their free
times
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time
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 as they want to follow the rest of
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the world
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 and have some taste of everything. Other than that, many
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modern citizens like to emphasize to others that they engaging with
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 fashion and really enjoying their lives.
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 trend
specially
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 can be seen in
younger
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the younger
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 generation as they like to report every
aspects
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 of life
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social media to get
large
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 number of reactions, comments and followers. Not only that they like to imitate celebrities and their behaviours
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.
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, most
of
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people
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the people
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 choose permanent hobbies and
interest
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interests
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,
then
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 engage with those
activities
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 from the beginning
of
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or
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 later after having some experience as
an
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example we can say some human beings still
playing
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play
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 particular
spot
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spots
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such
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 as cricket even though they are in
there
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their
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 forties.
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This
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people
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 started playing during their childhood and still like to continue it. Some individuals engage with travelling or reading books throughout their
live
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. In conclusion, though
youngest
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the youngest
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 follow
latest
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the latest
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 trend during their free
times
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time
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 majority will engage
with
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in
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activities
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 which
is
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truely
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truly
 Desired by their heart sooner or later.

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