The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The bar graph compares the proportion of several majors in a university in 2012 for male and female academic staff members, and these majors are: arts,
business
, education, engineering, law, medicine and science.
Firstly
, engineering accounted
the
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highest percentage for
males
, but for
females
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it was the lowest one of all 18%.
Besides
, for
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the one that comes at the top is education which was at 72%,
although
for
males
it was the
least
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one at 25%.
In addition
, medicine had almost the same ratio for both genders.
Also
,
business
and science
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after
the
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engineering, it reached
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62% for
males
.
However
, for
females
arts was in second place at 58%, after engineering major, followed by medicine at 50%.
Overall
,
females
were less interested in these two majors engineering and
business
, but their big interest went
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choosing education and arts.
On the other hand
,
males
seem to like engineering the most,
as well as
science,
business
and law 60%.
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