The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010

The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010
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The pie chart illustrated the proportion of a variety of
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which contributed to electricity from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
, coal and Natural gas were significant in 2010.
However
, nuclear
power
had the smallest percentage in 2010. When it
comes
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the smallest sector, it can clearly be seen that
hydro
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power
was the least in both 1990 and 2010. Take a closer look at the figure, nuclear
power
and
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hydropower
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power
were the most modest parts, which accounted for 17% and 6% respectively in 1990.
Besides
, nuclear
power
had the most
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obvious
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rockected
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rocketed
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by one-half from 1990
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to
2010.
In contrast
,
hydro
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power
only experienced a
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drop
about
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4
percent
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in the period.
Furthermore
, Natural gas and coal had the same proportion in 1990, which was totally unchanged in 2010. They both modestly increased by 15%. Natural gas, which used to be the largest section, fall noticeably by almost one-fourth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
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