The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph presents the types and proportions of
men
’s and women
’s high education
degrees in Australia in 1999.
Generally, we can see a wide disparity in proportions in different kinds of education
with the most popular for men
skilled vocation Change noun form
men's
diploma
and for women
undergraduate Change noun form
women's
diploma
.
In contrast
to men
, women
considerably smaller than men
tend to get a skilled vocational diploma
which is only approximately 10 %, and it stands last
in the percentage of women
Change noun form
women's
education
. In comparison with it, undergraduate credentials are the smallest popular education
for men
and it is around twice as small as this
degree for women
.
On the other hand
, a bachelor’s degree has almost identical values both for both
sexes nearly 50 %, for men
this
value is just slightly lower by 5 %.
One additional detail to add is that only undergraduate diploma
and bachelor’s degrees have a bigger share of Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
education
among women
, whereas
three other equalizations rank higher among men
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