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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate.Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take

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Dear Manager I am here in your hotel
at
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room
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 was made 2 days ago and since
then
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ben
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 with some
issue
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 with the air system in my
room
. I know that we are in the middle of the summer, but I
am write
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 to you with
hope
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 that my case can be solved.
In
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 my first day here, the temperature was very
confortable
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, about 75º F, perfect
to
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 me, and
in
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 the
fisrt
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first
 night I
wake
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 up in the middle of
night
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 and the LED
painel
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panel
 show me 80ºF, I do not know what is
happaned
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happened
, I
do not touch in nothing
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, just it
is change
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 alone. Was so warm inside the
room
, that I
am have
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 to take a shower for cooling my body,
due to
us
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 stay in July, was impossible to open the windows, and I try
reset
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 the
air conditioned
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, he make some noise and start
blink
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, and
finally
 start cooling again. I hope that you can
sent
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 someone to fix
this
 issue in my
room
, because
that is
 my first time with some trouble in
this
 hotel, at least
if
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 was impossible to solve
this
, I would like to change to another
acommodation
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accommodation
.
To
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 conclusion, I know the hotel is
full
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 capacity, but I love
if
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 you pay attention
in
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 my situation here. Yours Faithfully John Phill
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